You're so cold...

[Ka.avik]

written 12/2/04; Inspired by the heavy metal song (?) So Cold by Breaking Benjamin. The lyrics don't really resemble this, of course...
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You're so cold, but feel still alive;
Lay your hand on me, one last time?

What is it like, to cross that bridge?
tell me as you go (but I dont want to lose you)

Others have gone; I cant see them now.
life is a state, and you're moving soon.

I feel your hand in mine; I see your painful stare.
But I cant tell anymore; are you really there?

...hush; I'll be there when you greet me
Its alright; let me be, this one last time.

You have to see this, I have to do this.
because its just a ride.

Play it as you're dealt. dont crumble over this.
but I'm no longer in your grasp.

[Ka.avik]

written 12/2/04; Inspired by the heavy metal song (?) So Cold by Breaking Benjamin.

I'm like, the only one on this page with no responses. I understand that maybe nobody's feeling dumped on, or stuff, right now, but...having to respond to your own thread?

I believe when I wrote this, I had been concerned that the coming spring would founder my horses, and perhaps even see the last of my bestest friend ever, Bo (26yr arab gelding).

I guess I should also clue people in to the fact that I saw my mother's health deteriorate throughout her life, until she died when I was 15. So when you see that I'm drawn to very dark poetry (Nathicana, by HP lovecraft), just realize that may be a heavily influencing factor.

I don't know what I'm going to do when I lose Bo, and I know it's going to be "soon". As I recall, I was mourning the loss of my dog a year before I had to put her down, too. I guess I'm just like that. Or something.

[Avengardh]

Eh, sorry?

I rarely look at all the threads posted in here, didn't see yours until today.

There's not much I can tell you besides that, I write somewhat dark poetry myself at times, it happens.

[Ascending]

Don't let it get you down, enjoyment of poetry usualy requires emotional involvment. Supposedly INTPs fear emotion. :)

I decided to remove my own poem after only one person responded.

[Edmond Zedo]

Would you prefer negative responses?

[Star]

I enjoyed your poem but thought that it was much too personal to comment on. Look at it now; it'd be much better standing alone, without any replies wouldn't it? :)

[Geoff]

You also need patience, we arent a quick type. I posted some pictures on here sometimes that sat for a week before suddenly the thread caught alive. We arent an organised lot!

-Geoff

[Ka.avik]

Would you prefer negative responses?

If that's how you feel. Personally, I kinda just expected some wiseguy to reply enigmatically:


That's...cold.

And DeepSky: it could just as easily work as a 'dark poetry' thread, or the like.

(btw, I think I left it up a week before commenting...didn't I?)

[euterpenc]

Poetry is too... "expressive."

It's a good poem.