death of a brook

[Shai Gar]

through the trees a sparkling brook
down a hill a sparkling brook
over the snow a sparkling brook
its sights, its sounds, my breath it took
for it as gone and i am shook
no more on it to look

[philonightmare]

I like this. Very rhythmic.

[Shai Gar]

:) the way it came to me was very very inspirational, i was looking at a girl whose name was brook and the world just disapeared from me and i was looking at a brook(stream) and the begining line came to me and i didnt know where to go so i just worked on it for a few minutes while the teacher was looking at drafts

if kurupt ever gave a fuck about a bitch
i'd always be broke
i'd never have no motherfucking endo to smoke

[Claverhouse]

You should examine this girl carefully in case she's a naiad or nixie; which may account for your strange experience.

Unless 'endo' is hallucinatory.


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[Shai Gar]

i just wrote out a few lines from a snoop rap, endo = weed.

but no she isnt, i just have an overactive imagination

[CoHo]

so I took a look
at death of a brook

I'm usually quite passive
and I hope you will forgive

please don't throw a fit
but I think it's crap

[Shai Gar]

:) a nicer poem than mine, i quite like it